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October 2001: Meeting the Mark: When English Is Not Your First Language  

The Iranian author is a professor of anthropology at Vrije Universiteit in Amsterdam.

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On Monday 5th of April, there was a large picture of Iranians dancing on the first page of Metro section of the Newspaper (The Orange County Register), reporting that there were 8,000 Iranians at Mason park in Irvine. 38

On Monday, 5 April 19XX, the front page of the Metro section of The Orange County Register carried a large photo of dancing Iranians, and reported 8,000 Iranians at Irvine’s Mason Park.  32

This is the main difference with intentional hybridity, where the struggle is to accept the plurality of vision in life. Intentional hybridity is about the existence and most importantly the acceptance of simultaneous consciousness in cultural difference. 37

The main difference between the two is that intentional hybridity struggles to accept the existence and simultaneous consciousness of a plurality of vision in life within different cultural contexts. 29

However, despite the fact that external factors such as war, revolution, and natural disasters are the main causes of refugees leaving their homelands, this does not necessarily exclude the aspect of choice. To explain this point, I will concentrate on the case of political refugees whom this book is about. 50

However, even though war, revolution, and natural disasters are the main causes of refugees leaving their homelands, these external factors do not necessarily exclude the aspect of choice. In the case of the political refugees profiled in this book… 39

Despite growing attention for women as agents of change in refugee studies, women still tend to be seen as marginal. This tending to marginalize women becomes clear because women are often considered to be predominantly dependent on their husbands in terms of the reasons for becoming refugees. 47

Nonetheless, women still tend to be seen as marginal because their reasons for becoming refugees are often considered a consequence of their predominant dependence on their husbands. 27

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