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| Everybody
started running around trying to cover their cheese, bread, fruit, pottery and furniture. |
The vendors scurried
about, trying to cover their goods. |
| I remember
seeing lemons and oranges rolling all over the place, and the guy I had crashed into,
kneeling down quickly trying to get his fruit before it got into the muddy road. |
Lemons and
oranges rolled everywhere. The man I had crashed into knelt down quickly to retrieve his
produce before it met the muddy road. |
I was immersed in my thoughts when suddenly I heard some bushes moving by
the lake and I got startled. |
I was immersed in
my thoughts when suddenly the sound of some bushes moving by the lake startled me. |
| His
face illuminated every time he mentioned her. |
His every mention
of her illuminated his face. |
The dancing went on and on and I managed to politely refuse with a smile a
couple of offers to dance, pointing at my head with dismay as if I had the most terrible
headache. Which I did, by the way. |
The dancing went on
and on. With a smile I politely refused a couple of offers to dance, instead indicating my
severe headache. |