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Pith

December 2001:  Personal Statement

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I first encountered conflict between diverse individuals while on the varsity football team at S.U.N.Y at Stony Brook. The team included eighty-nine teammates from various environments such as the city, suburbs, and different countries. We quickly realized that different regions taught various systems, which caused our views to conflict. For example, my teammates from the suburbs had a more conservative philosophy. They were taught to run the football. In contrast, my teammates from the city were more aggressive as they were taught to throw the football. Conflicts arose as we worked hard to learn and adjust to each other’s styles. 100

The S.U.N.Y. at Stony Brook varsity football team consisted of eighty-nine diverse individuals from different cities, suburbs, and countries. We quickly realized that different regions taught various systems that brought our views into conflict. For example, teammates from the suburbs were taught to run the football while those from the city were taught to throw it. Conflicts arose as we worked hard to learn and adjust to each other’s styles. 70