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CONNECT CLEARLY
What's Your Good Word?
Whereas prefabricated phrases CONFOUND and obscure a
painful fact in the original paragraph in a staff memo, the edited paragraph CONNECTS
because it is brief, direct, clear and human.
CONFOUNDED |
CONNECTED |
| "It
is my painful duty to inform you that circumstances forced me to request the Finance
Manager to relinquish his position. This action was not taken lightly or without
incontrovertible evidence. Information received last Friday confirmed suspicions raised
after taking the position concerning the misrepresentation of facts both before and after
his appointment as to the holding of a doctorate. He has submitted his resignation
effective January 22, 1999." |
Effective
January 22, 1999, the finance manager has resigned his position with XXX Company |
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